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Some Random Poetry

Discussion in 'General Chat' started by DeathBringer125, Apr 17, 2019.

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  1. DeathBringer125
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    DeathBringer125 Well-Known Member

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    Hey I decided to post some of my poems on Lustria. Lol they tend to be a bit dark but nonetheless here they are.
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    Beware the beast of shadow, it whispers in the Dark

    Beware the dark things silent for they shall always hark

    The dark thing down here lurking, its stare like an icy Fang

    We meet his claws with steel, the result is a resounding clang

    His cries sorrowful and soulless, fill our hearts with dread

    We know we cannot hold, we know we will soon be dead


    Woe to us, soon our glorious line will be at an end

    Woe to us, soon our majestic halls will be stained with red


    I know my brethren have fallen all but me

    The beast is not consoled, and will not heed my plea

    It closes on me wraithlike, the shadow of my doom

    And now I know that my end will be soon


    (I might reword the end a bit because it doesn’t quite fit.). Tell me what you guys think!
     
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    I like it a lot! in my opinion, the ending is perfect.
     
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    Brilliant! I agree with @Paradoxical Pacifism - the ending works very well. Personally there are a few odd words I would drop to aid the flow a bit, but otherwise it’s great!
     
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    Lol this poem was written for a D&D campaign. Sad thing is the campaign didn’t get far due to us having a nasty habit of ending campaigns quickly. But I might re use this poem or make a new one for a campaign soon. Also here is another one I wrote.

    The Shadow approaches me like an aberration.

    It watches my every move and never breaks fixation.

    A chill creeps up my spine causing me despair.

    Causing my morale to go without repair.

    As it nears i suddenly see it’s cold dark eyes.

    Clouded and soulless it approaches with sinister pride.

    Should I try to run, try to run for aid.

    Alas it watches me with claws like iron blades.

    This one was a random poem I wrote after playing a horror game on my phone (wasn’t scary but the one bad guy I liked to play had long claws and I got the idea from that.)
     
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